Friday, February 13, 2009

The Small challenge

I added a small challenge to Elakiri and many people did reply with some stunning creations of their own.

Here I am re-posting them as a tribute to all who contributed. .. starting with my first post as well.

Yes.. it's just a small challenge for the almighty of all you poets and poetesses.

I jot down something the other day.. and I just can't seem to finish it .

Finish it in the sense of putting some right worlds and giving the whole thing a better face lift with rhyming words and an overall "feeling" for it.

So, use this. .. put some of your own words, make it beautiful.. give it a feeling, cause I "feel" that it's such a nice set of words aligned together to express a beautiful feeling.


Quote:
My Soul longing for you,
You are my unseated desire,
My heart is restless, Bleeding into my life,
Walk with me, in this lonely world...

I am walking through the dark nights with fragile dreams afraid I'll crash
The flame of hope burns bright, but I fear a storm,
A storm which can ravage my dreams,
All I seek is a "yes"....

There is the moon and the skies,
I am afraid of the moon disappearing behind clouds,
loneliness bites, as my pulse quickens,
without a moment of respite,
it's a strange tale,
with nothing but restlessness....

All I seek is a

"YES"

Let's see something beautiful

Sri Lion

Horizon dressed in rainbows amid mighty rains
Like sunshine hold the fate of a night's tide in vein
End my craving, douse the flaming
All I seek is a YES..

JayanthaH

Whisper could break serene
Would drift clouds to cover the moon
Make my world dark again
Save me…………..
Don’t say “YES”
Just think it aloud
Save my day, my night & my insanity
I don’t want to be sane………………again

HimaliL

It’s the story I hear and to live in forever
Be the prince and princess or sweet angels
But I don’t want anyone come ruin my land
I know I can protect you
All I seek is a ……………“YES”

Ireshasy

when I seek for "YES"
rainbow comes and vanishes
dark mist runs in the fairy land
all mellodies become silent
freeze thoughts and dreams

waiting till realize n say "YES"
till a tear brings a dearest warmth
till strings make enchanting music
till a moon shine over the clouds
till a wetted heart shiver in magical portion...

3 comments:

  1. It's hard man! Even with lot of cross couplings, since it is about what 'you feel'. But it's worth giving a try cos there won't be any more invitations from you ne ;)

    but :( you know I'm not good at this

    No I really never want to be crazy,
    But I want to be
    in this specific moment,
    at least, until I realize,
    I'll be lying with this feeling
    of seeking a "yes"

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  2. :( :( :( :( maath liuwa but...............

    ok here we go...:P
    all the permision granted to anyone who correct my mistakes :)

    My Soul longing for you,
    You are my unseated desire,
    My heart is restless, Bleeding into my life,
    Walk with me, in this lonely world
    Walk with me, over the galaxies
    Searching for our own world
    I don’t want to be tired, in this journey
    All I want is a murmuring “yes” A “Yes”…only from you...



    I am walking through the dark nights with fragile dreams afraid I'll crash
    The flame of hope burns bright, but I fear a storm,
    A storm which can ravage my dreams,
    I feel no fear if you stand next to me...
    I ask not a cover, but a feather to save a dream...

    All I seek is a "yes" to save a soul…


    There is the moon and the skies,
    I am afraid of the moon disappearing behind clouds,
    loneliness bites, as my pulse quickens,
    without a moment of respite,
    it's a strange tale,
    with nothing but restlessness
    All I want is a sniff of air to fade my tiredness...,
    to bring back my sundered moon


    All I seek is a

    "YES"

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  3. :P added as last stanza

    A simple but strong YES…
    Which has all the power to bring -
    shining stars to my sky,
    Singing birds to my trees,
    Blooming flowers to my garden,
    Overall a heaven to my sight…

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